Fun Summer Days Blog #2

Those nice warm breezes that cool me off from all the sweat that had accumulated on my forehead, giving my body relief from all the heat it’s been feeling. I take a deep breath in, feeling new again, refreshed. Not that I mind, I enjoy being under the sun. I get enough wind every time I run, feeling my feet pound on the ground, my hair rising up and exposing my neck. Running feels like flying, after a while where I don’t even feel my feet anymore, like my legs are no longer a part of my body, it’s as if I am floating. My chest begins to feel tight, the air has been removed from my lungs and suddenly I feel my legs as my own again, aching a bit. My body has demanded a break. Water from the public fountain tastes like the best thing on Earth, so fresh, clean, and pure. Not being able to get enough of it. I take a seat and hyperventilate until my lungs inflate again with air. Time is up though, as one of my friends is approaching quickly but not fast enough as I dash away as far as I can. My feet are taking flight again but this time they become entangled and my knees and palms take the brunt of the fall. I skid across the cement. Without another thought I jump up from the ground and swerve around the corner. After a few more minutes of my other friends getting caught, everyone is breathing heavily, gasping for air, and rushing each other at the fountain. I approach victorious when suddenly there is a sizzling sensation in my hands. Bright red scratches on my palms, shreds of skin coming out, dirt surrounding it. Both of my knees looking identical. The once relaxing and rejuvenating wind had become a warning for upcoming pain. My hands close up, my knees pull inward but my head faces the clouds. Feels very bittersweet to feel such pain and pleasure simultaneously. My friends ask me if I’m ready to play again, I smile.

Comments ( 0 )

  1. Gisselle Ramirez
    What I absolutely loved about your piece is that flowed really nicely, I really had fun reading this out loud. You did a great job at the description, I could feel the hot summer day and see the injury after you fell. Lastly I just really loved how you ended it with the "I smiled" because it just let me know that the fun still continued and it was just a really good way to wrap it up. Awesome job!
  2. Zhindel Cepeda
    I love your piece the way in which you go about describing your love for running and the runner high. I felt like I was reading one of those intros to a movie. you know where the main character starts running and they tell you everything you need to know before the story starts. Can't wait to see what you come up with next.
  3. Asim Andre
    This piece does a great job building up anticipation. You do a really great job slowing things down and taking us through the sensations of you running and rehydrating. It's even better that you have so much variety in terms of sentence length because this adds to the impact of some of the shorter lines like "My body demanded a break." While the line itself has a certain finality to it, the fact that it's so brief adds to its strength. I also loved the way you ended the post, with you at last acknowledging the scrape and then still wanting to keep playing. It was a great way to convey that part of yourself.

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